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While not the most exciting proposal, governance is a key issue when it comes to managing and mitigating all kinds of risks, especially climate risk. By increasing transparency, getting citizens more directly involved in the decision making process, giving them more options for feedback and the ability to monitor impacts - governments can create better policies that affect behaviors and outcomes from regular citizens to entire corporations. While there are some feasibility issues with this concept, especially it being entirely dependent on government to own and operate this system, if executed, this could have huge impacts on changing behaviors and leading to much better policies and regulations that could dramatically reduce carbon emissions (and other emissions). Plus, the data would be more transparent and more easily measured by government entities and third parties. Granted, the current White House administration would not implement such a thing, therefore it wouldn't have any impact -- but under the right politics and leadership, this could be a game changer for how our democracy works, how we engage the citizenry and how we monitor and measure impacts of policy.
However, we would need to see more detailed project costs and plans for execution to advance this proposal to the next round.
The proposal has a very academic writing style, and we suggest to rewrite the proposal to be more relevant and approachable to the audience. For instance, the term ICT is not explained. Although the reader can scan the introduction for some clue, it still remains unclear. For any of the Climate CoLab projects to succeed, the authors need to provide their various audiences and customers with a constant, patient, clear explanation of their objectives and expertise. We cannot ignore the elemental dissonance from entrepreneur to market that this one problem amplifies in this proposal. We hope this proposal could be improved and resubmitted for future CoLab contests.
Although there is a compelling presentation of the theoretical framework supporting the concept, there is not enough detail on how the effort would be executed, nor details about costs.
The proposal could be more clearly articulated, as it is rather abstract. It is vitally important to increase the availability of information about the sustainability of public practices, and the judges believe the proposal seeks to contribute to that effort, but it is difficult to understand how
Stakeholder Engagement and Governance are key to better managing any sustainability challenge and businesses are already utilizing these strategies to better manage risks and opportunities in their own business models. So it's a compelling argument to make that using these strategies to get citizens more involved in shaping, executing and evaluating sustainable policies could have vast impacts on how we manage global sustainability issues, like climate change. This proposal is highly theoretical in nature and could be more specific in terms of what the author is proposing here. But all in all, governance is a key, though not sexy, strategy for advancing sustainability.
Nov 6, 2017
Thank you so much for your valuable inputs and comments on my proposal. I am so grateful that you have endorsed the theoretical framework and share my belief that governance is a key strategy for advancing sustainability.
As you have pointed out, the initial draft is rather abstract and difficult to understand. Therefore, I have reorganized the draft by focusing on practice, i.e. how to implement the practical implication of the theory. In order to make it less abstract, a number of examples are used to illustration the practice. In addition to better explaining the execution, I have also rewrite the cost estimation. Last year, My team and I have discussed a contract to redesign the Delaware Sustainable Energy Utility Website Website. The redesign of a website is part of proposed practice. We have also learned about other bidders' proposal as outside contract. With this experience, I am able to estimate the cost of implementing the practice.
Regarding the new version of the proposal that I have just handed in, here are the questions that I have rewritten the answers to: "Pitch" "Summary" "What actions do you propose?" "Who will take these actions?" "Where will these actions be taken?" "In addition, specify the country or countries where these actions will be taken" "What impact will these actions have on greenhouse gas emissions and/or adapting to climate change?" "What are the proposal’s projected costs?". I have also modified my answer to the question of "what are other key benefits". Illustrations and tables are added with uploaded links so that the proposal can be understood easier than before. Other than its implication in practice, the theory itself is not discussed in the new proposal.
I would like to thank you again for reviewing my proposal and hand picking it to be one of the semi-finalists. Thank you all for your hard work running this contest. I will keep my figures crossed. I sincerely hope that I can make it to the next round so that I can meet with all of you in person and learn from other brilliant participants.